The chart below gives information about European people of different age groups who went to gyms once a month or more between 1990 and 2010.
The chart below provides information about Europeans in four different age groups (18-24 ,25-34,35-44 and 45 over) who went to gym once a month or more between 1990 and 2010 .
Overall, gym attendance increased significantly across all groups during the given period. However, the youngest age group (18-24) and those aged 25-34 showed the highest percentage of attendance, while the older age group (45 and over) and those from the 35 – 44 age category had the lowest proportion of appearance.
In 1990 , the percentage of people aged from 18 to 24 and 25-34 stood at approximately 9% and 10% , respectively. Both groups saw dramatically growth over the years, with the 18-24 age group experienced a sharp increase from 2002 , peaked at 60% in 2010. Similarly, the 25-34 group grew slightly around just under 40% by the end of the period.
When it comes to those aged from 35 to 44 showed a noticeable growth over time, finishing at 40% in 2010. Meanwhile, the oldest age group (45 and over) experienced slowest increase , finishing at around 20%.
IELTS writing task 1 tekshirish mezoniga muvofiq tekshir va baholash mezonlariga muvofiq bahola va tekshir
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some issues with word choice and collocation.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are only minor errors. However, there are some issues with punctuation.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and examples.
Suggestions
- Include specific data from the chart to support your main points.
- Provide more detailed analysis and comparison of the data.