The diagram shows how to make jam from the fruit.
The diagram illustrates the process involved in making fruit jam.
Overall,this process of making jam involves steps beginning with pouring tap water into a bucket and mashing of the fruit followed by pouring and packaging and finally transforming the jam into family breakfast.
At the first stage,the fruit poured in a bucket with tap water to clean it for the next stages.It is also obvious that cleaned fruit is transferred to the next step,where it is mashed.In this step,the mashed fruit is cooked at the high temperature for ten minutes, during which,some ingredients such as one cup of water, four cups of sugar,and two table spoons of peanuts are added to enhance the flavor and consistency.Then,in order for to be cooked completely,it is transferred into another process of cooking where it is cooked at high temperature for half hour.In this stage,four cups water and two cups more sugar are added, considering its good flavor.
Subsequently,at the fourth step,cooked jam is poured in different containers,Next,all containers are closed and kept for one hour.Eventually,in the final stage,it is served on the tabel for the family to enjoy it together in their breakfast.
The essay presents the process in a logical sequence but lacks clear paragraphing and some linking words.
Suggestions
- Use paragraphing to separate different stages of the process.
- Include more linking words to enhance flow.
The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety and precision.
The essay has several grammatical errors, including verb tense and article usage.
The essay covers the main stages but misses some details and lacks comparison where relevant.
Suggestions
- Include more specific details from the diagram, such as exact quantities and times.
- Make comparisons where relevant to highlight differences in stages.