the chart show the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea drinking and buying in 5 australian cities.
It is illustrated by a bar chart some information about people’s consumption coffee and tea Buying and drinking habits in 5 different Australian cities.
Initially, went to café for coffee and tea in last 4 weeks was most favorite option And figures indicated that Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart had the most percentages That all three of them reached to more than 60 precent while Brisbane by a slight decreased To 55 precent however, Adelaide dropped significantly to just under 50 precent. Bought instant coffee in cast 4 weeks is second option for people what’s more Statistics have been so much closer to each other as result it can be mention that Brisbane and Hobart beside the Adelaide were between 50 and 55 precent in contrast Melbourne and Sydney had a slight decreased and achieved under 50 precent. Bought fresh coffee had at least percentages for Sydney and Melbourne was almost the Same which shown 42 precent but 3 others city were under 40 precent.
In conclusion, café is most popular choice for Australian people.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
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- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary and there are several instances of incorrect or awkward word choice.
The essay contains a number of grammatical errors and there is some awkward or unclear phrasing.
The essay provides a basic overview of the information presented in the chart. However, the essay could be improved by providing more detailed explanations and by making more specific comparisons.
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- Provide more detailed explanations and make more specific comparisons.
- Use a wider range of structures to discuss the data.