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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car or motorbike. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the modern world, keeping roads safe is the primary responsibility for government. Therefore, some people consider that it is a better option to set a larger minimum legal age for driving cars. However, I totally disagree with this statement, because there are several measures that are more effective in improving roads.
It is believed that raising a minimum legal age may help to reduce the number of accidents and keep roads safe. However, the other major methods may also play a role in improving safety of roads. One of them is extending roads, meaning that those in power should invest financial resources in improving roads construction and condition. This may lead to driving cars with less risk and provide better access for pedestrians to minimise accidents rates. Therefore, I think enlarging roads construction is of utmost importance for both drivers and pedestrians to keep roads safe in any situation.
Another better option to avoid collisions is road signs. In other words, this method may play a factor to reduce the amount of traffic and improve road safety, especially in rural areas where people may face a number of dangerous situations, such as breaking their bones, cars and even premature deaths. Thus, both people and authorities should bring different types of road signs in order to inform the people what they have to do when they are driving.
In conclusion, while people claim that increasing minimum legal age groups would be the best way to keep people safe on roads, I still believe that there are other sufficient measures that can improve safety of roads and people in the same way.

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The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. However, there are a few areas where the flow of ideas could be improved.

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The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some complex and less common lexical items. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are only minor errors. However, there are a few sentences that could be rephrased for clarity.

The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout. However, the argument could be more fully developed in places.

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