Number of tourists visiting a Caribbean island (2010-2017)
The graph illustrates the number of tourists visiting a Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017, divided into three categories: visitors staying on cruise ships, visitors staying on the island, and the total number of visitors.
Overall, While the number of visitors staying on cruise ships showed a consistent rise, those staying on the island fluctuated initially before increasing steadily towards the end.
In detail, total visitors, which had the highest shares of tourists visiting started 1 million after which its figure rose gradually from 1 to around 2.7 before increasing dramatically by 2017, peaking at 3.5 million. Similarly, the cruise ships’ visitors reached approximately 0.6 million in the initial year, before increasing to around 1.3 million visitors in 2016 which was 1.5 in the final year.
The million of visitors staying on the island began at 0.75 million in 2010 and doubled to 1.5 million by 2013. It then fluctuated slightly between 1.2 and 1.3 million until 2015. By the end of 2017, the figure recovered to 1.5 million and hit a low among other tourists visiting.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. The use of cohesive devices is effective, and there is a good range of linking words. However, the flow of information could be improved in some places.
Suggestions
- Try to use a wider range of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of collocation. However, there are a few awkward or incorrect phrases.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there is some use of passive voice, which is appropriate for the task. However, there are a few grammatical errors that affect the overall clarity.
The essay provides a clear overview of the information and makes appropriate comparisons. The key features are identified and described adequately. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and examples.
Suggestions
- Try to provide more specific details and examples to support your main points.
- Make sure that each paragraph has a clear focus and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this focus.