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Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to express interest in your company’s a new job that I was saw in your online channel in telegram,on Monday,13th of February.
To bo honest, I have been studying in International Digital university almost 3 years and now I have take some achieves such as certificates from this field.At this time,I can manage to company’s exercise,for I was worked in a company, last year and I have some experience with this occupation.When I move away my a new home,I was leave my previous job .
When I come to my a new area,I was looking a job.Your telegram channel which ”Digital world”I found a advertisement and I am writing to this letter,since I can work a part-time on the week and this job has a good salary in your job.
I am looking to hear from your very soon.
Yours faithfully,
Mohira Anvarova.
The essay has a basic structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. However, the organization of ideas is not clear, and there is no logical progression in the content. The use of linking words and cohesive devices is minimal, affecting the overall flow of the essay.
Suggestions
- Use paragraphs to separate different ideas.
- Employ cohesive devices and linking words to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary and includes awkward or incorrect word choices. There are several instances of incorrect word usage and awkward phrasing that detract from the overall clarity and effectiveness of the communication.
The essay contains numerous grammatical errors, including incorrect verb forms, missing articles, and issues with subject-verb agreement. These errors significantly impact the readability and professionalism of the essay.
The essay does not fully address the task. It appears to be a template response that does not provide enough detail or specific examples to demonstrate the candidate’s qualifications for the job. The essay lacks a detailed explanation of the candidate’s experience and skills that are relevant to the job description. Additionally, the essay does not follow the proper format for a cover letter and lacks a polite closing statement.
Suggestions
- Provide specific examples of your experience and accomplishments that are relevant to the job.
- Use the job description as a guide to structure your essay and address all the requirements of the task.