The graph below shows four methods of dealing with waste in four countries.
Bar chart compares four different countries in terms of ways used for eliminating waste.
Overall, it is clear that the proportion of waste dealer by using chemicals is the highest in all countries, with exception of the Netherlands.
We can see from the bar chat that Netherlands and UK percentage for burning waste was the lowest, at 10% and around 3%. While figures for Italy and Spain stands at 29 and 30%. The proportion of recycled waste in Italy, Spain and the Uk almost the same, at around 15% but a figure for the Netherlands is around 12%.
It is noticeable than the Netherlands destroyed its waste by using fire, at almost 70%, burnt waste percentage in Italy is the second highest, at 20% and figures for Spain and the Ul almost the same. The percentage of waste dialed by chemicals is the highest in the Uk, at roughly 65%. While the reverse was true for The Netherlands with percentage of 7%. What is more figures for Italy and Spain are similar.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the data. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies and the choice of words could be more precise.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are some errors, but these do not impede communication.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and by making more effective use of data to support the main points.
Suggestions
- Provide more specific details and make more effective use of data to support the main points.