The graph shows the number of male and female students studying IT at university from 1985–2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares the number of two gender students who study IT at university between 1985 and 2015. Overall, the number of students from female increased significantly over the 30-year period while males consistently outnumbering females. Although the growth trend varied for the two groups, in 2005, both genders converged at one point.
In 1985, there were around 10,000 male students enrolled in IT, compared to only about 5,000 female students. For the next decade, both groups saw steady increases, with males reaching approximately 15,000 and females 10,000 by 1995. From 1995 to 2005, both genders experienced rapid growth, reaching at 25,000, unlike after 2005, the trends diverged. While the number of male students continued to rise sharply almost to 40,000 in 2015, the number of female students peaked at around 23,000 in 2005 and then declined slightly to 20,000 by 2015.
The essay is logically organized, with clear progression of ideas. However, some sentences could be more concise for better flow.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to enhance flow.
- Avoid redundant phrases.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear focus.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary, though some word choices are awkward.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with occasional errors.
The essay addresses the task effectively, summarizing key trends and making relevant comparisons.
Suggestions
- Include more specific data points for clarity.
- Ensure all key trends are highlighted.