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School layout in 1985 and now

Two maps illustrate the transformation of the school’s layout since 1985. Overall the school has been modernized and it now has more classrooms which enables it to include higher number of students.
In 1985, the school offered limited and simple facilities. Access and departure were at the northwest and north south corners of the map. Near it there was a car park, outlined with paths, which formed square. There was also an office, with a spacious library to its south. To the right, rather small car park and classroms were located. A path, perpendicular to bigger car park separated them from classroom block with 2 storeys. Lastly, tge rest of the map showed playing fields in the south.
Since then, the school has changed significantly. The entrance, exit and the office remained in their places but car park changed its shape to semicircle. The library has gone and in its place are learning resources center and computer room, providing easier and efficient ways of learning. Although classroom block hasn’t changed location, another storey has been added and two classrooms were constructed below it. Another alteration is the construction of a pool and a fitness centre at the expense of southwest side of the playing field

6.0

The essay presents information in a logical order but lacks clear paragraphing. Transitions between ideas are not always smooth, which may confuse the reader.

Suggestions
  • Use clear paragraphing to separate different time periods.
  • Employ more linking words to connect ideas smoothly.
  • Clarify the sequence of changes for better understanding.

The essay uses a range of vocabulary relevant to the topic, but some word choices are awkward or repetitive.

The essay contains several grammatical errors, including incorrect verb forms and article usage, which affect clarity.

The essay addresses the task effectively by describing changes in the school layout. However, it lacks specific details and some inaccuracies are present.

Suggestions
  • Include specific details about new facilities.
  • Ensure accuracy in describing locations and changes.