The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
The picture illustrates the changes that took place in an island after facilitating buildings for tourists. Overall, there were built many accommodations and other necessary buildings for visitors; also there was constructed a pier in order for the guests to sail there.
Before constructions, the island was literally empty with only some palm trees located in some places. Then, there were erected 15 bungalows for tourists to stay. In the center of the island now there is a reception building, which is surrounded by the accommodations. Near the reception, there is a big restaurant on the northern side of the island. People come to the reception by the path, which starts from the southern part, where there is a pier with some boats. On the west, there was a beach, and it has been changed, but now some swimming facilities are available there unlike its past condition.
Despite all the new constructions, the northern-east side of the island has not been transformed and still available for more buildings to be erected.
The essay is generally well-organized, with a clear overview and logical progression. However, some sentences could be better connected, and the use of linking words could be improved.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to connect ideas smoothly.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
- Avoid abrupt transitions between sentences.
The vocabulary is adequate but not particularly varied. Some words and phrases are repeated, and there is room for more precise language.
The essay demonstrates a reasonable range of grammatical structures but includes some awkward phrasing and errors.
The response addresses the task effectively, providing a clear overview and relevant details. However, some areas could be expanded for greater depth.
Suggestions
- Include more specific details about the changes.
- Ensure all key features are described clearly.