The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given table and pie charts illustrate data about how many research students had in particular universities of Australia in 2001 and 2010. Overall, number of local research students was twice as much higher than international ones, as well as that of both types of students increased over the period.
Number of local research students constituted 33,657 in 2001, when it came to 2010, that of research students reached to nearly 50 thousand. Starting at 5,192 in 2001, number of international research students tripled to the almost 15,000 in 2010.Total figure for both international and local students made up 38,849 in 2001, while that of students comprised 54,081 in 2010.
Furthermore, percentage of local students was 43% for females and 44% for males in 2001. After which those proportions decreased to 35% and 34% respectively in 2010, by comprising total 73%. As for percentage of international students, proportion of males accounted for 9%, while their female counterparts was 4% in 2001. However, in 2010 proportion of those was recorded 12% for former gender, 15% for latter gender.
The essay presents information in a logical order, but transitions between points could be clearer. Some comparisons are made, but more could be included to enhance coherence.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Include more comparisons where relevant.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear focus.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but some word choices are awkward or imprecise. Repetition of certain phrases is noted.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures. There is a need for more complex sentence structures.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and precise data reporting. Some important comparisons and trends are not fully explored.
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- Include more detailed comparisons.
- Ensure all data is accurately reported.
- Discuss trends and changes in more depth.