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The diagram below shows the process of producing bottled and canned carbonate drinks.

The diagram demonstrates how bottled and canned carbonate beverages are produced. Overall, the process is a complex one since it requires the involvement of many special machines. It is also worth noting that the procedure actually involves three main stages, starting with cleaning water, followed by the actual production of carbonate drinks, and lately packaging the ready goods.
Before producing bottled and canned carbonate beverages, water needs to be cleaned through the specialized equipment. Initially, raw water goes into a filter for the very first time, after which it is processed in the water softener using chemicals. The first stage ends when the water moves to electric heaters via a pump.
The process of manufacturing gets started with clean water being enriched with carbon dioxide going into the cooling pipe. Next, carbonated water moves to the mixing tank, in which it is coloured and mixed with syrup to add flavour to the liquid. Once processed, it flows into the filter for the second time. Finally, just before bottles and cans are packed into boxes and delivered to a supermarket on trucks, they are filled with the substance, meaning carbonate beverages are ready for consumption.

7.5

The essay is generally well-organized, with clear progression through the stages of the process. However, some transitions between stages could be smoother.

Suggestions
  • Use more linking words to improve flow.
  • Clarify the sequence of stages.
  • Ensure each stage is distinctly separated.

The essay uses a range of vocabulary related to the process effectively, though some repetition is present.

The essay demonstrates a good command of grammatical structures with minor errors.

The essay effectively covers the main stages of the process, providing a clear overview.

Suggestions
  • Ensure all stages are covered in detail.
  • Avoid unnecessary repetition.