The graph shows the percentage of households in one country that had various goods between 2001 and 2008
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of families that owned different types of household items in the years 2001 and 2008.
Overall, The proportion of telephone that families owned reached its peak in both years while dishwashers were not as commonly used in 2001 and 2008. In all categories except for telephones, the proportion of families owning these items increased in 2008 compared to 2001.
The bar chart shows that telephones were the most commonly owned item, with almost 90% of families having one in both 2001 and 2008. Microwaves and CD players were also popular, with a high percentage of ownership in both years. The proportion of families owning mobile phones saw a significant increase, rising from about 60% in 2001 to over 80% in 2008. In contrast, dishwashers were the least commonly owned item, with fewer than 50% of households having one in both years. However, there was a slight increase in dishwasher ownership from 2001 to 2008. The ownership of other items, such as clothes dryers and home computers, also grew, although the increase was not as large as that for mobile phones.
The essay is generally well-organized with a clear overview and relevant details. However, some information could be more clearly linked.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to connect ideas.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
- Avoid repetition of similar ideas.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriately, though there is some repetition.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with few errors.
The essay effectively addresses the task, providing a clear overview and detailed information.
Suggestions
- Include more specific data from the chart to support claims.