Gym

The chaet illustrates information respecting European human of different age teams who went to gyms once a month or more
between 1990 and 2010
The main facts that stand out ar that the percentage of gym increased per a year from four ages.
Firstly, 18-24 ages started 8% 1990 and increased per a year 19%.However from 1998 sharply increased to 2010.Next ages is 25-34 thid ages slowly climb per a year.And 25-34 ages finished 50%
Secondly, The third ages is 35-44 and almost no increase is observed ar this age,but up to 40% before 2010.Next ages is 45 and over ages.The lowest performing age group is 45 and over.From 1990 to 2010 no increase this ages,However, 2010 45 and over ages result is 20%

4.0

The essay has a logical organization of ideas and uses cohesive devices adequately. However, there are some areas where the flow of ideas could be improved.

Suggestions

Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of ideas.
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic.

The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation.

The essay makes use of a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and there are some error-free sentences. However, there are several grammatical errors that affect the overall accuracy of the essay.

The essay provides a clear overview of the information presented in the chart and makes specific reference to the main features. However, the essay could be improved by providing more detailed analysis and by making more specific comparisons.