The pie charts compare ways of accessing the news in Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate different method of accessing the news in Australia and Canada.
Overall, the rate of online following the news was the most popular in both countries. And watching news through the TV was the second popular, while not specified methods showed the lowest rate of accessibility to news .
In Canada the biggest share was accessing online to news and composed 36% and in Australia it took the half portion of pie chart. Accessibility through TV was approximately the same percentage composing around 40%
In comparison with Australia that showed only 2% of accessibility to news through radio , in Canada people listened to news through radio more showing 7% . The percentage of print way in Australia was 7% but this rate in Canada was twice more
The essay presents information in a logical order but lacks clear linking words and cohesive devices to enhance flow.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to connect ideas.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
- Improve the logical flow between sentences.
The essay uses some varied vocabulary but lacks precision in word choice and some repetition is present.
The essay contains several grammatical errors, particularly with sentence structure and agreement.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detail in some areas and does not fully summarize all main features.
Suggestions
- Include more specific data from the charts.
- Provide a more balanced summary of all methods.
- Ensure all main features are covered.