The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams show how the floor plan of a public library has changed over the last 20 years.
Overall, the library has been modernized, with new facilities such as a computer room, a cafe,and self-service machines.the reading room and CDs section were removed.
Twenty years ago, the library had a reading room, an enquiry desk, and sections for adult fiction and non-fiction books. There were also areas for CDs, videos, and computer games. Today, the CDs section has been replaced by a computer room, and a cafe has been added.
The layout has also been changed. The reading room is now a lecture room, and self-service machines have been introduced. The children’s books section has been expanded, with storytelling events and sofas included.
The essay is logically organized with clear comparisons between past and present layouts of the library. However, some transitions between ideas could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to improve flow.
- Clearly separate changes in sections with more distinct paragraphs.
- Use introductory phrases to guide the reader through comparisons.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary relevant to the task, but it could benefit from more varied expressions.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.
The essay effectively summarizes the main features of the diagrams and makes relevant comparisons.
Suggestions
- Include more specific details about the changes.
- Ensure all main features are covered.