The chart below shows the percentage of river water in UK rivers that is classified as having good chemical quality between 1990 and 2002
The line graph illustrates the percentage of river water in Wales, Scotland, Northern Ireland, and England that was of good chemical quality from 1990 to 2002.
Overall, river water quality improved in most regions over the period, with Scotland consistently maintaining the highest percentage of good quality water. In contrast, Northern Ireland showed a sharp fluctuation but ended with a significant rise in quality.
In 1990, Scotland had the best water quality at 95%, while Wales was slightly lower at around 93%. England’s figure was close to 85%, and Northern Ireland had the lowest quality, at just under 80%. By 2002, Scotland still led, remaining stable at 95%, while England experienced a notable increase to over 90%. Wales saw a slight decline, dropping to about 92%.
Northern Ireland demonstrated the most dramatic change, starting at 78%, dipping in 1996, and recovering strongly to nearly match England’s level by 2002.
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The use of cohesive devices is effective, and the progression of the essay is clear and easy to follow.
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- Consider using a wider range of linking words or phrases to show more variety.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. The vocabulary is used appropriately with only minor errors.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are few grammatical errors. Those that do occur are ‘slips’ and do not hinder communication.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. The essay also includes relevant data to support the overview.
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- Make sure to include specific details and data from the chart to support your overview.