In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who are choosing to educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them school. Do the advantages of home education outweigh the disadvantages?
Education play an important role in people’s lives. Home-schooling has become prevalent among parents in some nations. Although there are some advantages to teaching children at home, they are far outweighed by the drawbacks.
Indeed, giving education to children at home has some clear benefits. For a start, when children are taught at home, thay are likely to be paid more individual attention. Parents, in teachers’ role, may be aware of their children’s learning speed and competence better than anyone as their children spend most of their time with them in their early years. Hence, with the help of this special knowledge, educational activities may be organized by parents according to children’s individual needs. Teaching maths can be a good case in point. A child who learns how to solve maths problems at a slower rate is taught in accordance with their ability. Children’s physical and social safety is perhaps another virtue of educating children at home. When attending traditional schools, kids may be exposed to bullying and other harmful habits such as smoking or drinking alcohol. Home schooling can be a good way to prevent children from being bullied or taking up bad habits.
On the other hand, I would argue that teaching children at home is generally disadvantageous for both parents and youngsters. Regarding children, social isolation is one obvious drawback. When given education at home, children are less likely to have time to interact with people of their age. Resulting lack of communication and interaction may lead to children’s feeling isolated and unable to communicate with others effectively. As for the parents, teaching children at home may exhaust their time and energy. Teaching maths, languages, history and other subjects in children’s curriculum may take a lot of time and can be stressful for a person. As a result, they may not have time for themselves or doing other activities such as recreation and hobbies.
In conclusion, although a few benefits of home-schooling can be cited, I am inclined to say that drawbacks ,such as social isolation for children and not having enough time and energy for parents, do outweigh them.
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion are clearly structured. However, there are a few instances where the flow of ideas could be improved.
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