The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in acountry. Summirize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The graphs show the overall proportion of released movies and tickets that sold between 1996 and 2006 in one particular country.
Overall, the shares of films in drama and comedy majors highlighted the top position as well as selling most of their tickets compared to other with small figure.
In 1996 and 2006 starting from about 25% the proportion of movies in drama peaked to 35%. While the figure in comedy and fantasy displayed 20% and just above 10% in 1996, then increased to 25% and about 15% respectively. In compare the figure I romance major stood equally between the years.
The tickets which sold in comedy and drama were much higher compared to other two. The shares of tickets in drama and comedy showed just above 15% and 20% in the first year then increased to about 17% for the first one and about reaching to 25% for the second one. With much small rate there was almost 5% differ in fantasy, showing an increase to 7% in 2006 with 2% differ in romance.
The essay lacks clear organization and logical progression. Some comparisons are made, but the structure is not cohesive.
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- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Organize information logically.
- Provide clear comparisons.
Limited range of vocabulary with some repetition. Some word choices are imprecise.
Frequent grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures affect readability.
The response addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and clear comparisons.
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- Provide more detailed comparisons.
- Ensure all key features are clearly described.
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