The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in acountry. Summirize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts illustrate data regarding a proportion of films that were released and total figure for sold tickets in 1996 and 2006 in a country.
Overall, while high figure for dramas were released in public, the reverse was true for romantic movies. Furthermore, tickets for comedy movies sold widely, whereas tickets for romantic movies hardly sold.
Focusing on released films, starting at quarter (25%) in 1996 , percentage of released drama witnessed 35% in 2006. This for comedy constituted at 20% in 1996, after which it increased gradually to 25% in 2006. The figure for fantastic movies started at around 12% in former year, and then rose at 15% in later year. Proportion of romantic movies exhibited just 7% in both years.
As for cinema tickets, the figure for drama tickets in both years experienced 15% and 17% respectively. In 1996, percentage of tickets on comedy movies were 20%, and in 2006, this figure increased slightly, reaching 23%. Other tickets sold less, percentage of fantasy were around 3% and 6% respectively, and this was for romance was 5% in 1996 and it declined further to 2% in 2006.
The essay presents information in a logical order, but the connections between sentences and ideas could be clearer.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to connect ideas.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
- Improve transitions between ideas.
The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety and precision. Some word choices are awkward or incorrect.
There are noticeable grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures that affect clarity.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and comparison of the data.
Suggestions
- Include more detailed comparisons between the years.
- Highlight significant trends and changes.
- Ensure all data points are accurately reported.