The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in acountry. Summirize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts illustrate data regarding a proportion of films that were released and total figure for sold tickets in 1996 and 2006 in a country.
Overall, while high figure for dramas were released in public, the reverse was true for romantic movies. Furthermore, tickets for comedy movies sold widely, whereas tickets for romantic movies hardly sold.
Focusing on released films, starting at quarter (25%) in 1996 , percentage of released drama witnessed 35% in 2006. This for comedy constituted at 20% in 1996, after which it increased gradually to 25% in 2006. The figure for fantastic movies started at around 12% in former year, and then rose at 15% in later year. Proportion of romantic movies exhibited just 7% in both years.
As for cinema tickets, the figure for drama tickets in both years experienced 15% and 17% respectively. In 1996, percentage of tickets on comedy movies were 20%, and in 2006, this figure increased slightly, reaching 23%. Other tickets sold less, percentage of fantasy were around 3% and 6% respectively, and this was for romance was 5% in 1996 and it declined further to 2% in 2006.
The essay is logically organized and the information is clearly sequenced. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
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- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and the majority of sentences are free from grammatical errors. However, there are a few instances of incorrect verb forms and word forms.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the information. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and by making more comparisons where relevant.
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- Provide more specific details and make more comparisons where relevant.