The table shows the obesity rate in one country over a period of time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph gives information about obesity rate in one country by age brackets from 1971 to 2005.
Overall, elderly people dominated the chart over the period. It is clear that the proportion of all age groups experienced stability after dramatic increase between 1976 to 1999.
People aged between 18 and 29 steadily grew from the year 1976, accounting for 21% by 1999, after this, trend remained stable at 25%. Middle-aged group of people between 30 and 44 initially constituted for 15% but by the end of 20th century this figure made up 30%z and then continued to steadily grow.
Dominating the chart, the percentage of individuals between 45-64 and 65-74 climbed up to 15% since 1976 accounting for 17%. Before the surge to 40%, age group for 45-64 remained stable at 35% over the period of 1999 and 2003. In contrast, the figure for elder people plateaued at 35%.
The essay provides a basic structure but lacks clarity in making comparisons and summarizing key trends.
Suggestions
- Use connectors to improve flow.
- Clearly compare trends across age groups.
- Summarize key points effectively.
The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety and precision.
The essay contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and accurate data representation.
Suggestions
- Include accurate data points.
- Provide detailed comparisons.
- Ensure all trends are clearly described.