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#des2024 #iran #academic #task1 Chart and table provide allocation of men and women for the household activities, apart from paid work, in 2008 in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the how many time males and females spend on leisure activities per day, while the bar chart shows how many hours spent on household activities.
Overall, men spent more time watching TV, radio and videos compared to other leisure activities. On the other hand woman spent more time on household activities such as cooking and washing than men each day.
In 2008, men spent significantly more time than women 137 minutes on activities like watching TV, videos, radio and 15 minutes on sports. However, womans spent 19 more minutes on reading activities each day.
When it comes to household activities, women spent more time than men. They spent 1 hour and 10 minutes on cooking and washing, 35 minutes on shopping, and 30 minutes on washing clothes and ironing each day. Interestingly, men spent only 19 minutes on household tasks such as repairs.

5.0

The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected, but there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.

Suggestions
  • Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
  • Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.

The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and the majority of sentences are free from grammatical errors. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect phrasing.

The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and by making more precise comparisons.

Suggestions
  • Include specific data from the charts to support your statements.
  • Make sure to compare and contrast the data to provide a more detailed analysis.