The diagram shows the stages in the process of canning fruit. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
It is shown on picture how apple is preserved. There are four stages of the process where each stage includes two or more steps.
To begin with, all process starts on gathering one specific fruit, in this case it is an apple. Once apples have been harvested, they are delivered to factory by truck. When the truck have arrived, all apples inside are transported to factory’s special washing place. All apples should be put on a machine, where they are laved and checked by workers, whether there are some bad apples. if there are, these apples goes as animals food to another place.
Before sealing apples in cans, they should be peeled and cut by employees or machines. Then, cans are filled by apple slices and syrup, moreover, jars’ lid is closed and they are started to heating. After that, cans are packed and goes to a lot of different places by a truck.
To conclude, the process of canning apple starts by harvesting and ends with transporting it throughout stores and cafes.
The essay presents the stages of the canning process in a logical order but lacks clear paragraphing and linking words.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Organize the text into clear paragraphs.
- Ensure each stage is clearly delineated.
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with some incorrect word usage.
The essay contains several grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement and article usage.
The essay describes the main stages of the canning process but lacks detailed comparisons and some key details.
Suggestions
- Include more details about each stage.
- Make relevant comparisons where applicable.