The diagram shows the stages in the process of canning fruit. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the steps involved in the process of canning fruit.Overall, the process
starts with harvesting the fruits, followed by preparation steps like washing, peeling, and cutting,
and ends with transporting the canned fruit to shops and cafes.
The process begins with harvesting fruits, which are then transported to a factory. At the factory, the fruits are washed, checked for quality, and graded. Next, the fruits are peeled, cut, and placed into cans along with syrup before being sealed. The sealed cans are then sterilized and heated to ensure safety. After labeling, the canned fruits are stored and finally transported to shops and cafes. In general, the process involves several steps, with key stages in the middle, such as washing, checking, grading, filling with syrup, sealing, and heating
The essay presents the process in a logical sequence, with clear transitions between stages. However, it could benefit from more explicit connections and comparisons between steps.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to connect stages.
- Include comparisons where relevant.
- Ensure each step is clearly related to the next.
The vocabulary is appropriate and varied, with some repetition. Further variety and precision in word choice would enhance the essay.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors. Sentences are generally well-formed.
The essay effectively summarizes the main features of the canning process. It covers all stages but lacks some detailed comparisons.
Suggestions
- Include more comparisons between stages.
- Highlight differences in processing steps.