The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry.
The diagram provides information about the manufacturing process of bricks for construction industry.
Overall , the process contains 7 steps starting with digging the clay that will be used to get bricks which will be then delivered in the last step .
The process starts with the digger that take the clay and put it into metal grid that cleans the clay and then lead through roller . The following step is adding water and send after that the process divides into two steps by putting the mixture to mould or to the wire cutter to get the bricks.
Bricks then will be kept in drying oven for one or two days. After drying the bricks go to the kiln and keep there first in moderate temperature around 200-980 then in high temperature (870-1300) . Then it will be kept in cooling chamber for 48-72 hours. As the penultimate step all the bricks must be packed and only then delivered.
The essay follows a logical sequence but lacks clear transitions between steps.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to connect steps.
- Ensure each step is distinct and clear.
- Summarize the process effectively.
The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety and precision.
The essay contains some grammatical errors and lacks complex structures.
The essay describes the process but lacks some detail and precision.
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- Include more details about each step.
- Ensure all technical terms are used correctly.