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Task 1

The line graph gives information about the number of closed and newly opened markets in a specific country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall, the total number of store closures and openings experienced downward throughout the given period. Additionally, the figure of closed shops witnessed a dramatic fall along with a climb in 2015, while this kind of drop can be seen in opened ones in 2012.
Newly launched stores started their trend with around 8500 and ranked first. However, the marked decrease in this figure occurred in 2012, followed by a steady and steep rise, reaching 6000 by 2014. Then, there was a notable drop to 4000 shops in 2015. Subsequently, it stayed unchanged in the following two years, after which it reached its lowest point by 2018, approximately 1000 markets in contrast with previous years.
In terms of for brocked markets, it began with around 6200 in 2011, in difference with former trends. After, it slightly declined and reached 6000 stores. Then it hit the peak of 7000 shops in 2013, before reaching its original position around 6200. Nonetheless, in 2015 this falling figure remarkably sped up and stood at about 2000, at the same year experiencing twofold growth. From 2016 to 2018, it maintained the same level of about 5000 markets.

5.5

The essay presents information logically but lacks clear paragraphing and transitions.

Suggestions
  • Use clear paragraphing to separate different ideas.
  • Add linking words to improve flow.
  • Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.

The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but there are some inaccuracies and repetitions.

The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing.

The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed explanation and some inaccuracies are present.

Suggestions
  • Provide more detailed comparisons where relevant.
  • Ensure accuracy in describing trends.
  • Include more specific data points to support statements.