The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015.
The pie charts illustrate local authority expenses in 2010 and 2015.
Overall, the expenditure on education, healthcare and pensions showed the highest result in both years , while interest on borrowing, culture and leisure and others showed the lowest rates.
Initially, transport, culture and leisure and other composed 3%, 2% and 1% respectively in 2010 , although after five years all of them showed the same 1% indicator. The figure of spending on interest on borrowing composed 5% and welfare was 8% in 2010 , following with significant growth to 10% for former and 13% for latter.
The percentage of expenses for pensions and healthcare was remained steady with small decline in healthcare for 1%. In comparison with defence that decreased from 17% to 14% , the rate of expenditure on education plummet from 24% to 21% in both years .
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