the tables and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where money came from and charts show how it was distributed
The table and charts provide information about the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain, including the sources of funding and how it was allocated.
Overall, the budget increased from 2017 to 2018, with larger contributions from the national government and local taxes. The majority of the budget was spent on salaries, followed by buildings and transport, while the least was allocated to technology.
In 2017, the total budget was £304.7 million, rising to £318.6 million in 2018. The national government provided the largest share, contributing £175.5 million in 2017 and £177.8 million in 2018. Local taxes also saw an increase, from £91.2 million in 2017 to £102.3 million in 2018. Other sources, such as grants, remained almost unchanged at £38 million in both years.
In terms of expenditure, the largest portion was spent on salaries, with 75% of the budget allocated to salaries in 2017, which decreased to 69% in 2018. Spending on technology saw a noticeable rise, from 8% in 2017 to 14% in 2018. The proportion spent on buildings and transport remained the same at 17% in both years.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the information. The writer uses appropriate cohesive devices to link ideas and paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of information from general to specific.
Suggestions
- Consider using a wider range of linking words and phrases to show more variety in your language use.
The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic usage. The writer uses vocabulary appropriately for the task, with only minor errors.
The essay uses a wide range of complex structures. There are a few minor errors, but they do not impede communication.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the information. The writer makes appropriate comparisons and provides relevant details.
Suggestions
- The essay could be improved by providing more specific details about the ‘buildings and transport’ category of expenditure.