the maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site
The two maps show the current layout of the Norbiton industrial area and the planned future development.
Overall, the main change is that the industrial area will be replaced by housing and recreational spaces. The new development will create a more residential environment.
At present, the area has several factories and warehouses. The factories are in the middle of the area, and roads run around them. The surrounding land is farmland, and there is a river to the north of the industrial zone.
In the planned development, most of the factories will be replaced by houses. A new road will be built, and a playground will be added in the center of the area. There will also be more housing to the south, near the town. The farmland and river will stay in place, but the area will be much more suitable for families and local residents.
In conclusion, the development plan will change Norbiton from an industrial area to a place for people to live and play, with housing and parks.
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. However, there could be better use of linking words to improve the flow of the essay.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of linking words to show the relationships between ideas.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are only minor errors. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect sentence structure.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the information provided. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and by making better use of data from the maps.
Suggestions
- Provide more specific details about the planned changes, such as the number of new houses or the size of the recreational areas.
- Make better use of data from the maps to support your descriptions.