The table below shows the monthly expenditure of an average Australian family in 1991 and 2001.
The table provides the information about monthly expenses in Australian dollars of an average family in Australia in 1991 and 2001.
Overall , the expenditure on clothing and transport decreased in two periods of time whereas the former showed the lowest figure and the highest amount of money was spent on other goods and services.
The expenses on food composed 155 and 95 on housing in 1991 , and climbed for 5 dollars in 2001 , reaching 160 and 100 dollars respectively. The electricity and water showed the biggest growth from 75$ in 1991 to 120$ in 2001. Other goods and services composed the highest figure that was 250 in 1991 and increased to 270 keeping the popularity in 2001.
The spendings on clothing was 30 dollars in 1991 and showed slight reduction to 20 dollars in 2001. The transport expenses also declined from 70 to 45 dollars in both years The total monthly spending in 1991 constituted 675 dollars and witnessed a dramatic increase to 715 dollars in 2001 .
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the data. The information is sequenced in a way that makes it easy to follow the trends, and there is a good use of cohesive devices. However, there are a few areas where the flow of information could be improved.
Suggestions
- Try to use a wider range of linking words and phrases to improve the flow of information.
- Consider using more complex sentence structures to provide a more detailed analysis of the data.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary to describe the data and express changes. However, there are a few instances of informal or non-standard language that should be addressed.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there is a good level of grammatical accuracy. However, there are a few instances of incorrect or awkward grammar that should be addressed.
The essay provides a clear overview of the data and presents key trends and changes. The information is accurately reported and relevant to the task. However, the essay could be improved by providing more detailed analysis and comparison of the data.
Suggestions
- Try to provide more detailed analysis and comparison of the data. This could involve identifying the largest and smallest expenditures in each year, or comparing the trends of different categories of expenditure.