The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons relevant.
The maps demonstrate present industrial place in the town of Norbiton and planned development of the site.
Overall, it is clear that, at the present time the place is full of factories, whereas in the planned development there will be public dwelling.
At the present time, in the north side of area there are farmland and river, whereas in south side of area there is a road, in the center of the road there is a way which binds with the middle of the area, where located rounded road, moreover there are 8 factories, 3 of them surrounded and remained factories located in order next to the road which attaches to rounded road from east side.
In the planned future development there will be 2 rounded roads, one of them is in the center of the road which is in south side, the second one remained in the middle of the region. In planned future there will be none of factories, in stead of them they planned to put 7 dwellings, shops, medical centre, playground, school and bridge crossing the river.
The essay presents information in a somewhat logical order but lacks clear paragraphing and transitions.
Suggestions
- Use clear paragraphing to separate different ideas.
- Include linking words to improve flow.
- Summarize key points at the end.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some repetition and errors.
The essay demonstrates limited grammatical range with noticeable errors.
The essay provides a general overview but lacks detailed comparisons and specific information.
Suggestions
- Include more specific comparisons between the current and future maps.
- Highlight key changes and developments clearly.
- Ensure all main features are covered.