The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
The bar chart illustrates the weekly expenses of families in one particular country in 1968 and 2018.
Overall, the chart shows a significant change in the way families spent their money over the 50-year period. In 1968, the largest share of weekly income went to food, whereas by 2018, housing became the biggest expense. The percentage spent on food and transport decreased, while there was an increase in spending on leisure, healthcare, and education.
Looking at the details, in 1968, food took up 35% of the weekly income, followed by housing at 25%. Other categories, like transport and education, accounted for smaller proportions, at 15% and 5%, respectively. In contrast, by 2018, housing accounted for 35% of income, while food expenditure dropped to 20%. There was also a significant rise in the amount spent on leisure (from 5% to 18%) and healthcare (from 2% to 8%).
Another notable change was in transport, where spending decreased from 15% in 1968 to just 10% in 2018. Education remained relatively stable, with a slight increase from 5% to 6% over the period. The proportion of income spent on other categories, such as clothing and footwear, also saw small changes.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the data. The information is sequenced in a way that makes it easy to follow the trends, and there is good use of cohesive devices to link the different parts of the essay.
Suggestions
- Consider using a wider range of linking words or phrases to show more variety.
The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary to describe the data and express the trends. The language is generally precise and appropriate for the task.
The essay demonstrates a good control of a variety of grammatical structures. There are few, if any, grammatical errors, and those that do occur are minor and do not impede understanding.
The essay provides a detailed and accurate description of the data presented in the chart. The writer highlights the main trends and provides specific details to support the overview.
Suggestions
- Make sure to include all relevant data from the chart in your report. While you have done this well, it is important to ensure that all information is accurately represented.