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the table below shows the employment of students from four countries in the UK after first courses in 2001.

The table under consideration compares Permanent, Temporary, Overseas, and Total in terms of their employment partners across four countries ( Scotland, England, Wales, and Northern Ireland) in 2001. Overall, Scotland ranked highest in permanent employment, while England leaned toward temporary employment, with overseas standing out as the top choice in Wales. Scotland had the highest level of employment than others.
In detail, Scotland led in permanent employment with a staggering 43.6 % among students, nearly two times higher than Northern Ireland’s intake. Following at a considerable distance were England and Wales, with respective figures of 33 % and 30 %.
When it came to Temporary employment patterns, England took the lead with an impressive 23 % in the UK, followed closely by 20.2% among foreign students. Meanwhile, Wales and Northern Ireland trailed far behind, registering lower figures of 12.4 % and only 8.6 % among workers.
Overseas employment witnessed the lowest rates in each area, with its lowest rate being 2,3 % in England. The total employment showed that Scotland and England achieved a higher percentage and a big percentage was seen in the employment of Scotland at 66.4 %. Similarly, England accounted for 58.3 % in 2001. On the other hand, Wales and Northern Ireland were 45,3 % and 33.6 % in 2001.

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The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.

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