line graph
The line graph illustrates the percentage of people who used five various communication methods – landline service, cellular phone service, internet service, fixed broadband, and mobile broadband – from 1998 to 2008.
Overall, the proportion of people who used cellular phone service became the dominant among all other communication methods due to continuous growth. Likewise, Internet service, mobile broadband, and fixed broadband experienced a slight rise throughout the period given. In contrast, the percentage of people who used land service maintained the same share as the start over the years given.
In 1998, both cellular phone and internet services stood at around 5% of the population, compared to 15% in landline service and no share in both fixed broadband and mobile broadband. While cellular phone service’s proportion increased sharply to 62%, the share of landline service remained relatively unchanged by 2008, with some slight fluctuations. The percentage of people who used internet service rose further to 18% over the period. Similarly, the proportion of both fixed broadband and mobile broadband, which started to grow in 2002, increased slightly to 6% over the period of one decade.
The essay is logically organized with a clear overview. However, some transitions between ideas could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more varied linking words to enhance flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
- Avoid abrupt shifts between different data points.
The vocabulary is appropriate and varied, with some repetition of terms.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with occasional errors.
The essay effectively summarizes the main trends and data from the graph, providing a clear overview and detailed comparisons.
Suggestions
- Include more specific data points for fixed and mobile broadband to enhance detail.