The diagram shows the process of producing edible oils and fats, and margarine. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the steps involved in the production of edible oils, fats, and margarine, beginning with raw materials and culminating in their distribution to shops or supermarkets.
The process starts with sourcing raw materials such as sunflower seeds, coconuts, and other oil-rich items. These materials are transported to a production facility where they are stored in silos. The raw materials are then subjected to crushing and milling to break them down into smaller particles. Following this, the material undergoes pressing, which extracts oil from the crushed particles.
The extracted oil is then filtered to remove impurities and subsequently steamed to further refine its quality. At this stage, three types of oil—sunflower, coconut, and refined oils—are separated and prepared for packaging. The oils are processed into edible oils, fats, or margarine, ready for consumer use.
Finally, the packaged products are transported to retail outlets, including supermarkets and shops, where they become available for purchase. This structured production process ensures the delivery of high-quality edible oils and fats to consumers.
The essay is well-organized and follows the sequence of the process clearly. Each step is logically connected, and the use of cohesive devices is appropriate.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to enhance flow.
- Ensure all steps are covered in the description.
The vocabulary used is appropriate and relevant to the topic. There is a good range of specific terms related to the process.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with a high level of accuracy. There are no significant errors.
The essay effectively summarizes the diagram and highlights the main features of the process. Comparisons are made where relevant, fulfilling the task requirements.