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The table gives information about the number of international tourist arrivals (millions) in 9 countries in 2009 and 2010.

The graph shows the information about the amount of tourist from abroad in 9 countries during the 1 year.
Overall, the table reveals that France received the highest number of tourist arrivals in both years, while Hong Kong experienced a decrease in visitor numbers.Germany demonstrated the biggest increase in tourist arrivals over the year
Looking at the France which maintained a number of visitors at 76 million in both years. In contrast, the US, Spain, and the UK all witnessed minor increases, with the UK experiencing the most significant of these at 3.6%. Italy’s tourist numbers rose slightly, by 2.3% to 45 million in 2010.
A different trend is noticeable in the figures for Turkey and China. These countries showed a much bigger increase, with 33% and 55%, reaching 45 million and 34 million arrivals respectively in 2010. Germany, however, saw the highest increase in tourist arrivals, more than doubling from 11 million to 23 million. On the other hand, Hong Kong was the only country to experience a decline, with an 11% decrease in the number of international tourists, falling from 10 to 9 million.
In conclusion, while some of the countries saw relatively small changes in visitor numbers, other countries experienced very significant increases. Germany and China showed impressive growth.

6.5

The essay is generally well-organized with a clear overview. However, there are some abrupt transitions and lack of linking words in places.

Suggestions
  • Use more linking words to improve flow.
  • Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
  • Avoid abrupt transitions between ideas.

The essay uses a range of vocabulary with some precision, but there are instances of repetition and awkward phrasing.

The essay demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures but contains some grammatical errors.

The essay adequately covers the task, providing an overview and specific details. However, it could be more precise in some areas.

Suggestions
  • Include more specific data points for clarity.
  • Ensure all trends are clearly explained.