Task 1

The line graph illustrates the percentage of four different age groups who take part in gym once a month or more the years of 1990 and 2010.
Overall those who observed lowest percent age group is 45 and over while the youngest age group had the highest figure throughout the period.
Adults age groups seemingly similar percentages.In 1990 group of 25-34 ages attended in a gym rose gradually approximately 50 percent in a two decade this was followed by 35-44 age groups reached around 40 percent by 2010.Regarding older age categories 45 and over starting just at 5 percent and grow significantly respectively 20 percent the years of 1990 and 2010 makes it the lowest rate while 18-24 age group who visit a gym increased fluctuating with 60 percent within 20 years remaing active demographic.

5.5

The essay has a clear overall structure and presents information in a logical sequence. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.

Suggestions

Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.

The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of an attempt to use less common and/or more complex vocabulary. However, there are some inaccuracies in the use of vocabulary and some words are used incorrectly or inappropriately.

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and the majority of sentences are grammatically correct. However, there are some errors in the use of articles and prepositions, and some sentences are unclear or awkwardly phrased.

The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and by making more specific comparisons.