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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The bar chart shows the changes in families’ weekly expenditures in 1968 as compared to 2018. Overall, there were at least slight disparities in almost all the expenses with the only exception to household goods, which remained the same over the period. In 1968 food emerged as a major expense with the rest of categories demanding approximately same outlay. By 2018, people allocated more money on leisure, housing and food, making a difference more pronounced, while the rest had less money to be spent on.
In 1968, population of the country spent 35% of their weekly income on food – an all-time high indicator throughout the chart. The next categories with high yet low as compared to previous one was housing and clothing related expenditures, 10% for each. The expenditure patterns of household and personal goods, transport and leisure had the same figure of less than a tenth of the overall weekly income to be spent. The expenditure on fuel and power amounted to just over 5% of the income.
After 50 years, expense patterns in almost all the categories underwent the alterations. Spending on pastime activities, accommodation, food and transport had relative percentages of over 20%, just under 20%s and 15% for each. However, expenditures related with fuel and electricity, attire and personal items had roughly the same expenditure rates of less than 5%. Household good appears to have left the same amount of money required on it in both years, just under 10% of total weekly income.

6.5

The essay generally follows a logical structure but lacks clear topic sentences and transitions between ideas.

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  • Use clearer topic sentences to introduce each paragraph’s main idea.
  • Improve transitions between paragraphs for better flow.
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The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary, though some word choices could be improved for precision.

The essay contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect readability.

The essay addresses the task and includes relevant information but lacks some detailed comparisons.

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  • Include more specific data points for detailed comparisons.
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