European people of different age groups who went to a gym once a month or more , 1990-2010
The line graph shows changes in the percentage of Europeans in various age groups who attended a gym at least once a month between 1990 and 2010.
Overall, the figure for all age categories saw increases of varying rates. Moreover, 18-24 and 25-34 age groups highlighted consistently bigger numbers throughout the period.
The younger adults followed almost similar patterns. In 1990, only about 6% of 18-24-year-olds attended the gym monthly, but this figure rose noticeably to just under 50% by 2010, making it the most active age category. Similarly, starting at 7% in 1990, gym attendance among the 25-34 age group increased steadily, reaching around 40% by the end of the span.
The similar scenario could also be observed in the remaining age ranges. The percentage of 35-44 age group going to a gym grew to 21% in 2006, after which it improved further to 40% in 2010. However, the 45 and over group showed the slowest growth, with the figure for rising from below 2% in 1990 to only about 10% 2010, remaining the least active age category during the period.
The essay is well-organized with clear and logical progression. However, some transitions could be smoother.
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- Use transitional phrases to enhance flow.
- Clarify comparisons between age groups.
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary, though some expressions could be more precise.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.
The essay effectively addresses the task and provides a clear overview of the data, though more detailed comparisons could enhance the response.
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- Include more detailed comparisons between age groups.
- Highlight significant trends more explicitly.