Pie charts
The pie charts demonstrate the key reasons why students applying for the specific university in the UK in 1987 and 2007.
Overall, head factor was appropriate degree courses which have slightly rising effect for applicants. Also, students motivated to choose the universities which are close to their parental home and look for teaching quality. Demand for other two reasons, however, decreased after two decades.
Degree of the courses faced a less, but positive change in the decision of students whether to study or not in a particular university. In the initial year applicants chose universities for this reason was 35% and after twenty years it was rised to 37%. In 1987, only a tenth students interested to choose certain university which is located near their parent’s home. This result increased almost twofold reaching 22%, in 2007. Teaching quality became more demanded than quality of the resources, it was grew from 15% to 18% in the country.
Resources quality took third place in 1987 with the result of 21%. On the other hand, in students decision about universities supply of high quality resources stand less required, 17%. In university choice, students pay noticeably less attention for the reason of good sports and social activities. It was revealed 19% in 1987 and went downward till 6% in 2007.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the information. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of an attempt to use less common and more complex language. However, there are some inaccuracies and awkward phrases that could be improved.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and there is some attempt to use a range of grammatical structures. However, there are several grammatical errors and some sentences are unclear.
The essay provides a clear overview of the information presented in the pie charts. The key trends and differences are identified and described. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and by making more direct comparisons where relevant.
Suggestions
- Provide more specific details and make more direct comparisons where relevant.