Bar chart below shows the average annual amount of chocolate eaten by people in 5 different countries in 2001 and 2021
The bar chart gives information about average annual amount of chocolate eaten by people among five countries(Switzerland, Russia, Philippines, Australia and Columbia) from 2001 to 2021. Units are measured in kg.
The Switzerland and Australia and Columbia are more eaten by than others. Firstly, Switzerland was ate chocolate about 9 kg in 2001 and and in 2021 they were ate about 8.5 kg chocolate which decreased than 2001. Secondly, Australia witnessed the same consumption of chocolate that is 8 kg per person between 2001 and 2021.
The Russia, Philippines and Columbia increased remarkably between 2001 and 2021. Additionally, while Russia increased consumption to 2 kg, Philippines increased measure about 0.5 kg in 2021. Moreover, Columbia consumed about 5 kg chocolate in 2001 and 7 kg in 2021, the measure increased to 2 kg for per person.
In conclusion, Switzerland’s measure decreased between 2001 and 2021 while Columbia, Philippines and Russia increased remarkably during 20 years. Additionally, Australia showed the same measure from 2001 to 2021
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