Present Office Building Kitchen Canteen Storeroom WCs Grass Entrances Grass Office Office Office Office Entrance Future Office Building Office Storeroom Outdoor Office WCs Seating Coffee Machine Area Entrance Meeting Chairs Area Chairs Chairs Office Office Chairs Chairs Entrance
The plans illustrate the layout of a particular office building at present and the proposed changes the future.
Overall, the office building has undergone significant changes, transforming into a more functional and collaborative space, with the addition of new amenities such as a coffee machine and a meeting area, necessitating the clearance of the canteen and grassy areas. It is also evident that the design has been developed by introducing outdoor seating and expanding office spaces, making it more employee-friendly and efficient.
In the current layout, the office building offers relatively fewer facilities. The access is from the bottom, with four small offices located on the left-hand side of the entrance. Further from the entrance, there is a restroom, adjacent to which is a grassy area. Similarly, the western edge features another grassy area near the entrance, while the northern section accommodates a kitchen, a canteen, and a storeroom in a consecutive order.
In the future design, by contrast, several transformations are proposed, with the office building welcoming quite a few facilities. The kitchen and canteen will be supplanted by additional offices, and a coffee machine will be situated near the restroom. The grassy areas will make way for an outdoor seating area on the west and a meeting area on the east, both of which being surrounded by chairs. While the storeroom, the restroom, and existing offices will remain intact, all offices will be increased in size.
The essay is logically organized with clear paragraphing. Ideas are connected well, but some transitions could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more varied linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
- Avoid repetitive phrases.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriately, though some words are repeated.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.
The essay effectively addresses the task, describing the changes in detail and comparing the layouts.
Suggestions
- Include more specific measurements or details if available.
- Ensure all significant changes are highlighted.