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THE TWO MAPS BELOW SHOW THE SITE OF A COLLEGE IN 2006 AND THE PRESENT DAY.

The two maps illustrate the transformation of Lynwich College since 2006. Overall, this Lynwich college used to be rather empty in 2006, with more green places than the present one. It is also worth to mention that the common facilities in the first map are also available in the second one, including both college buildings, car park, sports field, and a library.
In 2006, two college buildings were situated to the west and south of the map which can be reached by one main path. In detail, while the college building 1 lied to the south, another one was to the west. Noticeably, major college facilities for students were located to the east of the map. There was a car park at the top right corner, below of which was a library, with little green place. While sports field placed at the bottom right corner, the main parts of the map consist of leafy areas. Also, there was a main road to the south.
Since then, the college has changed considerably. The college buildings has remained intact, sports field minimize its size and a library has relocated to at the bottom left corner of map, with opening a way for sports center. The space of car park has halved and in the other half of space there is a bike storage now. A cafeteria has been built in the middle of the map, with many paths leading to each facility. One of them leads to a new structured bus station and main road to the north. All these alterations have been made to facilitate the student requirements and unfortunately they have resulted in the loss of leafy environment.

5.5

The essay demonstrates a logical structure but lacks clear paragraphing. Transitions between ideas are present but not always smooth.

Suggestions
  • Use clearer paragraphing to separate different time periods.
  • Add more linking words to improve flow.
  • Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.

The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but some word choices are awkward or repetitive.

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses and sentence structure.

The essay addresses the task but lacks depth in describing the changes and their implications.

Suggestions
  • Provide more specific details about changes.
  • Explain the implications of the changes on the college environment.
  • Ensure all key features are clearly described.