The
The charts show the percentage of volunteers by organizations in 2008 and 2014.
2008
2014
15%
9%
21%
17%
29%
24%
18%
8%
12%
7% .
15%
25%
Environmental
Sport
Educational
Art
Health Care
Others
5.0
The essay lacks clear organization and logical progression. The data from the charts is not integrated into a coherent narrative.
Suggestions
- Organize the information into paragraphs.
- Use linking words to connect ideas.
- Summarize key trends and changes.
The vocabulary is basic and lacks variety. There is minimal use of synonyms or advanced vocabulary.
The essay contains grammatical errors and lacks complex sentence structures.
The essay does not fully address the task requirements. It lists data without providing an analysis or summary.
Suggestions
- Summarize the main trends and changes.
- Include a clear introduction and conclusion.
- Explain the significance of the changes.