Write a letter to a local newspaper expressing your opinion about an environmental issue in your community. In your letter, include: • A brief introduction of yourself and why you are writing • The specific environmental issue you are concerned about • Your opinion on the issue and any suggestions for improvement • A call to action for readers or local authorities
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to support this notice that can help to solve the environment issues with people. As well as, many people will read this local newspaper and they may attend the clean groups.
I am Eshboyev Aslbek, I am studying at a local school. I usually suffer to spread stink from old factory because this factory is extremely dirty and unacceptable disgusting. I am extremely happy to see the your notice from local newspaper and I support your brilliant work. However I can tell this. Although this work can make people happy, it may create issues anyway. One of the major problem will be cleaned the old factory from acid materials because people had experimented morely with chemicals in the past. In addition, this has damaged the environment seriously. There are no plants around the factory. I offer that you should attract the readers and local people because they can afforest saplings quickly.
I believe that There have been no environment issues in our neighborhood in recently years and everyone can enjoy from the woodlands.
Yours faithfully,
Eshboyev Aslbek.
The letter is somewhat organized, but the flow of ideas is not entirely clear. The writer introduces the topic but does not effectively connect their ideas. The letter jumps from one point to another without clear transitions, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. The conclusion is also abrupt and does not effectively summarize the main points discussed.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to ensure smooth transitions between ideas.
- Make sure each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The letter uses a range of vocabulary, but there are some inaccuracies and awkward phrases. The writer uses a variety of vocabulary, but there are some inaccuracies and awkward phrases. Words like “experimented morely with chemicals” and “afforest saplings quickly” are not used correctly, which affects the clarity and professionalism of the letter. Additionally, the word “brilliant” is not always appropriate in this context and can be considered somewhat informal.
The letter contains several grammatical errors that affect the overall clarity and professionalism. These include issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and preposition use. For example, “I am Eshboyev Aslbek” should be “I am Eshboyev Aslbek,” and “cleaned the old factory from acid materials” should be “cleaned the old factory of acid materials.”
The letter addresses the task, presenting a clear opinion on the environmental issue and suggesting ways to improve it. However, the letter could be more detailed and specific in its discussion. The writer introduces the topic by mentioning the problem caused by an old factory, but the issue is not clearly defined until later in the letter. The writer’s opinion is also somewhat unclear, and the suggestions for improvement are not well-developed. Additionally, the writer does not effectively use the format of a letter to address the reader directly, which affects the overall coherence and persuasiveness of the letter.
Suggestions
- Provide specific examples to support your argument and make your points more convincing.
- Ensure that you clearly state your opinion and that your suggestions are directly related to the issue at hand.