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The table and charts give information about doctors in Australia between 1986 and 2006.

The table and bar charts show how many doctors were employed in Australia and their distribution based on gender and place of birth between 1986 and 2006.
Overall, there was a rise in the number of doctors, with men dominating the field across the years. Also, the majority of the doctors were born in Australia, albeit the proportion of those born overseas showed a steady upward trend.
Focusing on the number of doctors in Australia, it can be observed that it stood at 23,720 in 1986. This figure then had a significant rise to 29,060 after a decade, followed by yet another increase to 35,450 in 2006.
As for the gender of these doctors, males consisted of 75% of the doctors in 1986. Over the following two decades, it experienced a gradual decline to approximately 70% in 1996 and 60% in 2006, making them significantly more involved in medicine than their female counterparts. Women’s proportion, by contrast, accounted for a quarter at the beginning, which then culminated in 40% by 2006, experiencing an upward trend over time.
Lastly, the percentage of doctors who were born in Australia was considerably higher than who were born outside the country in both 1986 (63% to 38%) and 1996 (59% to 42%), respectively. By 2006, however, the figure for both categories became exactly similar, recording 50% each.

7.5

The essay is generally well-organized, with a clear progression of ideas. However, some transitions between points could be smoother.

Suggestions
  • Use more linking words to connect ideas.
  • Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single aspect.
  • Clarify comparisons between data points.

The vocabulary is appropriate and varied, though some phrases could be more precise.

The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.

The essay addresses all aspects of the task, providing a clear overview and relevant details.

Suggestions
  • Include more precise data comparisons.
  • Ensure all key trends are highlighted.