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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

Informations are provided by the table and charts which illustrate the budget of the police in a Britain’s area in the years of 2017 and 2018. While the table highlights data on the money sources, the charts compare the money distribution.
Overall, it is immediately obvious that National Government was the number one source that money comes from and the least one was unspecified sources such as grants from the table as well as a significant amount of money source was allocated to salaries of officers and other staff from the charts in both years. Furthermore, the money from all sources increased in 2018.
Turning to details, in 2017, a huge amount of finance came from National Government which was contained 175.5 m and in 2018 , the money rose to 177.8 m . The second source was Local Taxes which was gained 91.2 m in 2017 and had a considerable increase in 2018, reaching to 102.3 m . However, other unspecified sources were the least on the list, containing 38 m in 2017 and had an increase to 38.5 m in 2018. In total, 304.7 m finance was taken in 2017, whereas in 2018 the total amount of money was 318.6 m.
When it comes to the allocation of money, the large amount of money was given for officers and other workers as a payment in both years with respective figures 75 % and 69%. A small amount of finance was spent for technology, showing the rate of 8 % in 2017 and 14 % in 2018. Buildings and transport were received the same amount of money in both periods which is 17%.

6.0

The essay presents information logically, but there are some issues with cohesion and coherence. Transitions between ideas are present but could be smoother.

Suggestions
  • Use more linking words to connect ideas.
  • Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
  • Improve the flow between sentences.

The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety. There are some incorrect word choices and repetitions.

The essay demonstrates a range of grammatical structures, but there are noticeable errors that affect clarity.

The essay addresses the task and includes relevant information from the table and charts. However, it could provide a more detailed analysis.

Suggestions
  • Include more comparisons between the years.
  • Elaborate on the significance of changes in budget allocation.