The pie charts compare the percentage of household expenditure in Japan and Malaysia across five categories: housing, transport, food, health care, and other goods and services.
The pie charts contrast the proportion of household expenditure in Japan and Malaysia in five categories, housing, transport, food, health care, other goods and services. Overall, in Japan most people spend their money for housing, but the lowest shares in food. In Malaysia other goods and services accounted for 34% which recorded the highest point.
Both of countries allocated the lowest shares for food 6% and 3% respectively. In Japan the most proportion of spending for housing which make up 29%, but in Malaysia this statistic more relevant for other goods and services which account for 34%. Moreover, health care is crucial which account for 24% and 27% either Japan or Malaysia, and also in Japan most people use transportation compared to Malaysia while Japan also allocated 21% shares for housing expenditure. It is also important noting that in Malaysian people spending for housing a less compared to services.
The essay lacks clear organization and logical progression of ideas. There are several inconsistencies in the data description.
Suggestions
- Organize the essay into clear paragraphs.
- Ensure logical progression of ideas.
- Clarify data descriptions.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary and some words are used inaccurately.
There are several grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures.
The essay does not accurately describe the data presented in the charts and lacks clear comparisons.
Suggestions
- Ensure data is accurately represented.
- Provide clear comparisons between the two countries.
- Use precise language to describe the data.