The percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in 4 countries in 1970 and 2000.
The line graph provides percentage of tourists who used five different types of transport to travel in a particular country over a period of 20 years (1989-2009). Overall, cars remained as the most popular type of transport, while the ferries had the lowest percentage of usage.
In 1989, about 50% of travelers by car, making it the most commonly used means of transport, and this trend reached its top to around 60% by 1999. However, the figure dropped to its origin by 2009. Furthermore, in 1989 around 35% of people used rails, over the 20 years figure had gradual rise becoming around 60%, and second the most popular type of transportation. Similarly, the use of coach illustrated stable increase over the given period, rising from 10% in 1989 to 25% in 2009.
The air travel loosed popularity over the given period, declining from around 40% in 1989 to 20% by 2009. Nevertheless, ferry usage remained relatively stable, fluctuating between 5% and 10% through out the whole period, and by 2009 only around 10% of people traveled by this form of transportation.
The essay lacks focus on the given task and describes a different graph. The structure is somewhat logical but not aligned with the task.
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The vocabulary is basic and repetitive. Some words are used incorrectly, affecting clarity.
There are several grammatical errors that affect readability. The sentence structures are simple and repetitive.
The essay does not address the task. It describes a different graph and fails to summarize the main features of the given task.
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